I'm not dreadfully comfortable sharing my writing openly.... though, it's something I'm trying to get better at. So, to hopefully pry open my comfort level, here's something simple to read in the meantime.
A Hand to
Hold
“You must be
her eyes, Child.”
The girl sat
stiffly—cradled in quilts. Her head rested against the wall, her
eyelids tight, dark circles forming beneath. She didn't make a
sound. Six was the boy, seven next month. The girl lost sight, the
small brother must see for her now. Their father placed a hand on his
shoulder. He cupped the boy's chin. "Samuel.” He
spoke in a low, fatherly tone. “You are her sight now. You must
never leave her side.”
The family
stood around the bed of the girl dripping with silent tears. Mother
ran her hands through sleepy hair. It was late into the night.
Samuel's head hung low with sorrow, looking at his own tears splash
onto his little leather shoes. Mother cried, which made the boy weep
all the more. Father's face remained grave and stone.
The girl
stared. Blank. Colorless. Blind. She opened and closed her eyes. But
no vision returned. Louise: ten years old. Eleven creeping up rather
soon.
A fall to be remembered. 'Slipped on the icy water of the frozen lake. The girl's screams dribbled down the air as she lie to bleed through the snow. A trail of red ran after the boy who dragged his sister to aid. He found them, and they carried the blind child.... only to be hit with the news all dread. Your child has lost her sight. Forever. Surely they denied it. But it became fact. No longer a fictional fear.
So it began.
The boy used his eyes to see for two. Not only one. Years later, they
laughed together, swinging their feet from the bridge across the
stream. He was ten, the girl fourteen. She sill wore her hair in
braids and her ankles were not yet covered.
He would lead
her through the forest and down to the creek. He'd take her hand and
gently place it into the water. He'd watch a beautiful smile stretch
across her face. Her freckles danced in the sun, her golden hair
glistened with beauty. Best friends, they were. Not just siblings.
Till the very end.
Years passed,
and he stayed right by her side. Never left. Not even once. When she
cried—so did he. When she laughed—so did her little brother. They
were glued it seemed.
Eventually,
she found another. He found her. They met, and everything tumbled ever so
quickly. He loved her. She loved him. Along the road of life, father
had gone to be with the Lord, and Samuel was the new man of the
house. He was to take care of Mother and Louise.
The day came
for Samuel to let go. The man asked Louise to marry him. She
accepted. The small boy, who was now fifteen, had to give her over.
To give her to another man, so that he may now be her eyes. Her brother did not let go until the wedding
day.
Samuel
remembered that night. The night she became blind. The night his
father told him he'd have to see for two. The night of silent tears.
He walked her
down the aisle. Hand in hand. And through a moment of tearfully
bittersweet delight, he slowly placed her hand inside another's.
His own palm
felt empty now—lonely and homesick. He watched her all decorated in
white. Beautiful as ever. Louise felt for his face and planted a soft
kiss upon his cheek.
“You saw the
world for me.” She whispered. “I could never repay that. You gave
me hope, Samuel. And I thank you. For everything.” Tears fell from
both their eyes, and he let go of the pleasure of seeing for two and
gave it to a new man. “You are no longer my eyes,” she spoke
softly.
“But you'll always be my best friend.”
~Sayda
oh my word. Glory!!! I cried...i cried...this is so emotional and sweet!!!! Oh I loved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you so so much! I think I might have also cried a tear while writing it. It is rather emotional. Thank you for reading it! <3
DeleteOh thank you for writing it!
ReplyDeleteRainbowchelsea89 wanted me to say this:
ReplyDeleteThat is truly a beautiful story. <3
-Rain
Oh I love it!!! It is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteWaterSnail wanted me to post this:
ReplyDeleteI liked this a lot! You got me to care about the characters fast which very few people have been able to do for me in a short story so good job. It was a enjoyable read. Keep up the good work!
-WaterSnail
Oh, wow! This is really good. I love it <3
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Truly beautiful. I love the emotion and the way you weave the story into existence. Great work, keep it up!
ReplyDeletePowerful.
ReplyDeleteYes...I cried also...fantastic story!
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